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As the Tears Fall Again by ~Kuro-shadow:iconKuro-shadow:



I keep staring out my window
Watching the rain fall in streaks against the pane
I can't let the tears fall again
I know I'm stronger than this
Thoughts running forever through my head
The same questions time and time again
Why do I keep watching?
Because I cant go on
In this place time stops
And it is where I shall remain
Forever reliving that moment

I try to shut it from memory
Fighting every remembrance of it
And yet it still remains
The memory of my pleading
The recollection of the running
Can someone tell me what's next?
It’s over as quickly as it began
Now living feels like death to me
It never could have happened
But I don’t wish it never happened

Ever since that day, nothing has been the same
Ill never forget what you did to me
How could you have taken my only joy?
My life has seemed to darken from that day on
All colors washed out by my tears
Day feels like night, and night is death
But no, I can't let you see me cry
There's no problem here, I'm fine
Life goes on it’s no big deal
Then it all comes back again...
©2008-2010 ~Kuro-shadow
:iconkuro-shadow:

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Written by Lewisjb3 and Kuro-shadow.

(no, you can not count this as art theft because we wrote it together)

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:iconlonelyalakast:
hehe, art theft good job kuro-shadow :D

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"I've never had any intentions about anything. That's why I am where I am today, which is neither here nor there, in a literal sense."
— Edward Gorey
:iconkuro-shadow:
lol ty
ive been accused of art theft in the past (if i actually did it it was untentional) so i thought i would add that. lol

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i am but a mirror, i only reflect the light you cast upon me
:iconlonelyalakast:
lol, nice :)

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"I've never had any intentions about anything. That's why I am where I am today, which is neither here nor there, in a literal sense."
— Edward Gorey
:iconlewisjb3:
And all the best parts were written by her of course... ;)

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Why is it that my life can be summed up in one name...
Moreover, a name that isn't mine...
:iconkuro-shadow:
lol um no, most of the best parts were written by you. i just helped it all flow.

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i am but a mirror, i only reflect the light you cast upon me
:icondarkdiarypeeker:
I almost started to cry :( Meh, I thank you both 4 writing this and the other one falling ^_^ Those poems is exactly what I need it to read :hug: Thank yous

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:star: 4Kids Rapes Anime!!! :star:
:iconmidnightxxvision:
its okay, did you mean for some lines to be much longer than others?
:iconkuro-shadow:
really? thanks! its the first time Lewisjb3 and i have worked on a poem together so im really glad you liked it!

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i am but a mirror, i only reflect the light you cast upon me
:iconkuro-shadow:
well we didnt exactly plan on having all the lines be the same length... i didnt think it mattered.
we arent exactly the most experienced of poets... ^^;

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i am but a mirror, i only reflect the light you cast upon me
:iconmidnightxxvision:
well you don't have to have all the lines the same lenght, thats not what i was saying, sorry for the confusion. I was just saying that a few lines were much longer than all the rest and i think that messes up the flow a little..
personally i'm a fan of puncuation at the end of lines, you should think about how you want the reader to read it and where you would like them to pause and breath

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